as we ride on the shoulders of the sea.
Let's strain the deep for its fruits
that have helped form this clay.
Let's pray that a good wind blows
and takes us back to the shore
today, tomorrow, every day.
~~
Contributed to thursday poets rally 41
Wednesday
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love the way it begins.. and then it simply flows..
ReplyDeleteHO HO HO and a bottle of rum!!!
ReplyDeleteno pirates here though..imagery is excellent...keep bothering the keyboard :)
like always...loved your poem and could actually feel the prayer in the last line :)
ReplyDeletelonging nicely expressed! my thursday~ http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/12/30/let-it-be-it/
ReplyDeletelet's hear you and pray..
ReplyDeletebeautiful sentiment,
lovely job.
welcome to poets rally.
:)
Very nice flow and depth of a mystical meaning...thank you for the privilege and best wishes with your creativity.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful song indeed. I can almost smell the sea and hear the waves crushing! ;)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Paulami, Chitra, Jingle, fiveloaf, Wellspring, Magdalena, Aashi.
ReplyDeleteI like this alot, it paint's such an beautiful picture! The sea is a great inspiration source...
ReplyDeletemusical
ReplyDeletelovely prayer poem. loved its musical quality and flow
ReplyDeleteReally a song..it rings beautifully while the read..
ReplyDeleteWonderful an totally refreshing!
Alcina
Kriss, yes the sea inspires..
ReplyDeleteTempleton, Hari, Alcina: once the poem was complete, I too felt its 'singable' quality :)
Ooh, it's got such a great rhythm. And I love "let's strain the see for its fruits."
ReplyDeletehmmm sweet! to conquer the elements/life! Nice write, enjoy the rally!
ReplyDeletehttp://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/04/09/cosmic-entanglements/
Thanks MAS, Lynn..
ReplyDeletelove this...clean and crisp like the sea.
ReplyDeleteThis is so beautiful and full of emotion. Makes me think you are a sailor.
ReplyDeleteSuch a lightness to this poem, beautiful!
ReplyDeleteTeri, this is the best compliment I've received as a poet!
ReplyDeleteTrekker, Thoughts, thanks!
Beautiful poem.
ReplyDeleteThe blog look, the banner, the color, the poem, the serenity of sea.. all an all, such an amazing calming effect! Loved ur blog and ofcourse the poem.. soft, small, lovely. :)
ReplyDeleteI am from ~
http://puplumages.wordpress.com/2011/04/02/the-alliterated-odes-the-alliterated-symphonies-of-the-mind/
Meremortal, Purvi, thanks .. am so glad you liked it all..
ReplyDeleteNice. I like it.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful....
ReplyDeleteThanks, Lisbeth, Rashmi!
ReplyDeleteand let's hope this prayer is heard every day by Him :) inspiring, and very beautiful.
ReplyDeleteRally Week 41 - My Poetry
Thanks Vinay!
ReplyDeleteI think you have created the new fisherman's creed. Wonderful.
ReplyDeleteA cheerful light touch = thanks!
ReplyDeleteNicely put...
ReplyDeletewow, sounds like a prayer, or an anthem. quite nice though
ReplyDeleteTorque, Paul, Scarlett, ibro:
ReplyDeleteThanks for dropping by and the comments!
nicely written..
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